Short film I made...

[DBP]

Hey all, me and a few fellows whipped up a quick little short film last Saturday nite.

Check it out and lemme know what ya'll think....

http://www.dyingbirdproductions.com/Films/Mov/Samauri Dream.mov

http://www.dyingbirdproductions.com/Films/WM9/Samauri Dream.wmv

[miker]

not too bad.

i thought some of the editing could be a bit tighter.

i'm not sure there's enough in there to make me want to watch the next part.

not a keeper, sorry.

[DBP]

Well, of the three message boards that I posted this flick on, I can immediately tell which one has the most advanced and skilled film makers.

Thanks for the comments/criticism guys. Seriously.

[Kev Owens]

I'd agree, it's not bad.

The fight scene looked pretty shabby though, and I'm sorry to piss on your chips here but it's SAMURAI not 'samauri'.

[andyblaa]

Not bad for a Saturday night. Overly long but just about kept my interest, if only because I was peering at the screen trying to work out what the hell was going on because it was way too dark.

I can't fucking stand that song you used at the start! It felt like a commercial for a feminine hygiene product.

You could make the blackouts much shorter and still have the desired effect. There are a few too many shots aswell, you could cut a lot and it would still all make sense and be slightly more dynamic (as much as I hate the word dynamic!)

I agree with Miker, unless it was much, much tighter, it wouldn't make me want to see any more. To be honest there story could do with being a hell of a lot more interesting aswell. Even though it's a short film you can still show character with small subtle things. It doesn't all have to be tense action. Maybe you want to be the next Michael Bay though, if so ignore my last few sentences.

Back to my original point though, it's pretty good for a Saturday night.

Andy

<font color="#a62a2a" size="1">[ March 10, 2004 12:52 PM: Message edited by: andyblaa ]</font>

[emjen]

It lasts a bit too long. Also, the 'falling music' in the beginning was a wrong choice IMO. You should've lit more, or at least set up the exposure on your camera a little higher.